Today's story is long lost hope by maleficent badillio. It can be found here: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3125558/1/long_lost_hope.
Summary
Amy has never really fit it. She finds out her father is Hagrid. That's all I can make out from this story.
My review
I'm just going to cut to chase. The author avoided the shift key like Rabies. She only capitalized grounds keeper. Which didn't need to be capitalized. She also puts author's notes throughout the story that really don't need to be there. She also has things in the story that don't really make sense. Like how a 16 year old gets 6,000,000 dollars from working at a coffee shop for three years. Does she also strip at this coffee shop? I'm pretty sure that's illegal. New's flash authors Hogwarts students start at 11 in their first year. Not 16. And don't give us costume porn. If the outfit is not important to the story then we don't need to read about it. I'd go more into this story but the author was just all over the place and the story made my head hurt. This story gets an F for being nonsensical, having horrible grammar and spelling. Not to mention a Mary Sue. This author also made me borderline violent and wanting to claw at her eyes.
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